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"Come back my child."

"I cannot Grandmother."

"You must come back or be forever lost."

"You don't understand."

"I understand much my child. I understand that you wish to choose this path. You go against my council."

No, Grandmother, I..."

"Yes! This path you are on will lead to your downfall. I cannot have that. You must come back. The path you take will only lead to ruin. Many have followed it before. None have come back. If you proceed, I cannot help you. You will be lost to me. You will be lost to this place where you belong."

"That is what you do not understand Grandmother. Here, in this place that I belong, I am and always have been lost."

"Do not speak foolishness child."

"Grandmother, I know that you do not understand. To you, this path leads to a terrible unknown. To me, this path is my salvation. I will walk it with assurance and courage. I have faith that I will find myself and all that I have ever truly wanted."

"Foolish child! You must stop at once. You are on the brink of disaster. A single step more and you will not be able to return."

"With this step, I become what I was meant to be. No longer constrained by fear."

"My child!"

"Goodbye Grandmother."


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This is my entry for LJ Idol: S10 Second Chance, Week 4. This week was an "Open Topic".

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Date: 2017-04-03 12:40 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] i-17bingo.livejournal.com
I love how profound this is. It speaks to generational differences, as well as to destiny. Well done!

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Date: 2017-04-03 01:20 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kajel.livejournal.com
Thank you!

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Date: 2017-04-03 12:48 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kathrynrose.livejournal.com
Every birth is a death.

:)

Is there a tarot influence here?

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Date: 2017-04-03 01:20 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kajel.livejournal.com
Not intentionally, but it is a very tarot day.

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Date: 2017-04-03 02:45 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kathrynrose.livejournal.com
That would make a cute story. The character is going about his/her day and random tarot card scenes pop up along the way.

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Date: 2017-04-03 02:47 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kajel.livejournal.com
lol That could be really fun.

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Date: 2017-04-03 03:11 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] xlovebecomesher.livejournal.com
I really like this!

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Date: 2017-04-03 02:16 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kajel.livejournal.com
Thanks!

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Date: 2017-04-03 04:24 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] fodschwazzle.livejournal.com
Seems kind of like how many of us are having to stake out lives after college (or before). The conventional path is nowhere near as safe as it once was. Nicely thinky piece.

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Date: 2017-04-03 02:16 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kajel.livejournal.com
Thank you!

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Date: 2017-04-03 05:48 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] wildrose.livejournal.com
This was very intriguing and has a lot of possibilities in it. I think it is one of these pieces that every individual interpretes differently depending on their own life situation. Great one.

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Date: 2017-04-03 02:18 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kajel.livejournal.com
Thanks. It's interesting to see how different people interpret it.

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Date: 2017-04-03 08:21 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] eternal-ot.livejournal.com
I like the fact that you have kept it open to interpretation. The dialogues really reach out to create a scene in your mind. Nice take!

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Date: 2017-04-03 02:18 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kajel.livejournal.com
Thanks!

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Date: 2017-04-03 02:42 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] adoptedwriter.livejournal.com

Very powerful indeed!

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Date: 2017-04-03 03:26 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kehlen-crow.livejournal.com
This is awesome. Both of these perspectives are so familiar it hurts.

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Date: 2017-04-03 03:41 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] rswndrlst.livejournal.com

What a universal feeling the desire to break free from family tradition but there could be reason for the grandmother to be afraid, my obession with magical realism makes me wonder if there is a curse or a some evil that the family is trying to protect her from. In the end I think the decision to choose her own path was too important to her to heed the warnings (I can relate)

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Date: 2017-04-04 01:17 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] karmasoup.livejournal.com
Brilliant! Would that all could find such self assured courage, tenacity, and fortitude. Well played! :)

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Date: 2017-04-04 06:53 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] d0gs.livejournal.com
I realy love how this is open to interpretation too!

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Date: 2017-04-04 09:57 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] flipflop-diva.livejournal.com
Awwww. This is sad and sweet and inspiring all in one. It takes a lot of strength to do what you feel is right, even when it's not what others would do, but sometimes it also means leaving something else behind.

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Date: 2017-04-04 10:18 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] lolaslaughter.livejournal.com
I love this entry! The frustration coming from the Grandmother and her knowledge of her own mistakes mixed with the child's determination to form their own path and know what is right for them was beautifully written! <3

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Date: 2017-04-04 11:49 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] halfshellvenus.livejournal.com
You know, reading this it occurred to me that everyone who strays off the beaten path to find their own way usually DOES appear lost who don't understand what they're doing and/or don't believe in the possibility.

Every risk looks like courting death, and yet without it greatness is rarely achieved.
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